In search of the Eye

This is only the start of a Science Fantasy book I started on many years ago. It’s set in a 1900-1910 technological era but with magic still a force to reckon with. Putting this prologue out there might just get my motivation to some day complete the book.

“The game is set. Only his will shall decide the outcome”. The heavy velvet robes swayed as the two contenders rose from the table. Matching their wits and their insights was not uncommon. But never like this. Never had they played the game encompassing such a great arena and with this many elements. The game of life itself required more than sets of ivory and ebony pieces and a marble board. It included will – whatever that was – free or not; The proof will be the outcome.

The dark eyes of Salidus Taramostran rested for a while on his adversary. Temor Akatraz did a graceful job of hiding his emotions. A slight tremble around his nose however revealed the suspense. A brilliant mind, a genius scientist, physicist and mathematician. He knew a thousand ways a man could go mad and a couple of how to cure him. Temor could outriddel any man alive. A champion chess player, loving the game, loving the win. He was never a nerd, he knew his ways around women. Many a woman had fallen for the blue eyes, fair but stern expression, never revealing his true self. His body almost as fit as his mind. Stubbornness had gotten him far in life.

None of them looked nearly as old as they were. They still possessed that zest in life, that willingness to pick up the glove and to carry forward to victory. Both were intent on winning, if not for the same reasons.

Salidus’ gaze wandered, to other places, as usual. In and out of reality, of fantasy. An artist at heart, feeble to certain eyes, strong to others. A sort of mystery hung around the wise man. Creepy, yet calm. He was already leaving the game for the love of something else – a poem perhaps? Or maybe a little tune, humming ever so slightly in his mind. In stark opposition to Temor who never would leave this game. It would haunt him like that annoying little tune humming and chanting to rub away any lack of irritation. Temor wondered: “Did I pick the right boy? Of course it’s impossible to know on beforehand, but did I predict this one right?” The thought tormented him. He wanted to be sure like in chess where he would always hold more possibilities in his mind at once than any other man or creature. “Chess… but this is different… maybe… or maybe not. My predictions must be right, and so this is no different than a game of chess. I know the state of this game as we started and I know the rules. The outcome is bound to be set. It will be mate, for sure”.

Landscape of Amar

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6 thoughts on “In search of the Eye

  1. Goddamn Geir,I’d be the first to buy your book if the entire thing is written like this.
    Where is the setting?
    Norway perhaps? 🙂

  2. Very well done! Continue. If you need any guidance, please let me know. I’m a book and script editor/writer. Here’s somethings to thing about:

    1. There’s an exact way to start and end any chapter of any book, no matter the style or subject matter? Do you know it?

    2. There’s an exact “research to writing” ratio most writers have no idea about (particularly important for historical fiction)? Do you know it?

    3. Most beginning writers and even experienced writers can spend years writing their hearts out but never improve because they lack two basic but crucial writing skills. Do you know what they are? (Hint: It’s NOT grammar or spelling.)

    4. What “style” of writing must writers absolutely avoid like the plague and why?

    5. Do you know how to pick the best subject matter to write about?

    6. How many points does the best story structure have?

    7. I recommend at least two (and often three) books to every writer I work with. They are not books about writing, spelling or grammar. They are not novels, yet the knowledge in these books, used judiciously, will catapult you to success.

    8. Titles do matter. Do you know how to pick the best title for your book? Do you know how major publishing companies do it?

    9. There are only two ways to write dialogue–the right way and the wrong way. Most writers, even seasoned ones, fail abysmally at this.

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